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Review:TheGirlOnFire says:
House Cup 2014 review

Hello,
This very intriguing, I am very interested in finding out what happens next. I am dying to know what happened to her at the beginning of summer. I want to know what happened that resulted in her becoming psychologically damaged. I do not like her father, he hates magic yet he married a witch. I donít understand the logic. But then again maybe he feels inferior because his wife has magic. Also, I didnít like Gretchen. She seems too sell-involved and selfish. She doesnít care about what happened to her sister only about her budding relationship with Albus. I like how you have already started showing the relationship dynamics between her and her family members. I do hope she ends up being allowed to go to Hogwarts. A little CC, I would have liked to have read a little more description, I small amount could really make the scene seem more real to the reader. I do however understand that this is the first chapter and starting a story is incredibly hard to do. I wish you good luck on the rest of the story and hope that itís as good as this chapter.

TheGirlOnFire :D

Author's Response: Their dad just doesn't understand magic. And he is a bit jealous and feels left out. It really was hard writing the first chapter but thank you and I hope that too :)

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