I'M ALL CAUGHT UP THIS IS SO BITTERSWEET.
And... Enter best friend that's going to tell Fitz he's being stupid. Perfect. I'm glad. This is a brilliant way to start off the chapter. LOL, is that allowed. Awe, Fitz :( Yeah Max, you tell him! I love this scene, this scene is just absolutely brilliant. I love that Max is putting Fitz in his place and pointing out that he's repeating history. I really do just LOVE it. I hate Mariah, still. YES FITZ. YES SHE LOVES YOU.
Well, at least he's being productive and not sitting in a miserable stupor in his flat. I mean, I'd rather have a miserable productive coach than a miserable unproductive coach. Gosh, Fitz. Pay attention. Woah, dreads? That sure is different! Ugh, Fitz, stop being a punk. Ooh, he's thinking about her hair. AWE, he's in so deep there's no return. WHY CAN'T THEY JUST BE A THING THIS IS PAINFULLY HEARTBREAKING. UGH.
MARIAH IS SUCH A ksnjdk fnrjedkgkfjdm I wish I had more appropriate 12+ words to use there. My keyboard slamming will have to be enough to convey my emotions on that one. HOW DOES SHE THINK THAT SHE CAN JUST BE SO... BLAH. LIKE YOU DESTROYED TWO WHOLE RELATIONSHIPS, ARE YOU PROUD OF YOURSELF? Good for Fitz. Don't forgive her. Unless she fixes it between them, then she deserves a little credit. But I don't think she'd do that, so...
Haha, this is great. Smells like my grandmother's house. I love Beathans obsession with the gardens. She's such a funny character, that Beathan. WHY WON'T THEY JUST GET INTO A FIGHT AND ADMIT THAT THEY LOVE EACH OTHER. CAN THAT HAPPEN?! SOON?! I might die if they don't get back together soon. The suspense is LITERALLY killing me. Can't you tell by the constant caps-lock? sorry not sorry about that, by the way. :)
Awe. He stared at her and she stared at him and just awe. I also love the concept of that scene, he's in the window and she's down there with Beathan and then she's down there and he's in the window and Beathan is beautifully oblivious so it's this moment that is private and sweet but isn't private at all. Holy run on sentence, now I really am sorry for that. LOL I love how the word bucket wakes up Jinks. Priorities, man.
Oof, Fitz didn't need another way of being loud. He really didn't. I think everyone could've lived without that whistle. I can hear it in my head and it hurts my ears. I love that you point out how much work it is for them to play and how big of a workout it is. I can only imagine how intense it is to be swinging and blocking and flipping and rolling and throwing all while mainting balance on a broom. I mean, just wow.
What's up with Fitz and Rakes? OH. Oh wow. Poor Fitz. But he doesn't have to be mean to Molly. I think she's hurting more than he is. He's just being stupid and blind. She's genuinely hurt because he's offensive AND she loves him. So... STOP BEING A VERY MEAN RUDE PERSON FITZ. JUST STOP.
Ugh. I want them to kiss and makeup. This was a wonderful chapter, though. I really cannot wait for the next one!! ♥
xoxo Sarah ♥
House Cup 2014 Review
Author's Response: Yep, Max will absolutely tell him off for being stupid and a coward. And he's not wrong about that! Fitz needed to hear it, possibly more than once. He definitely requires a swift kick in the butt at times. Luckily Molly's the one who loves him, because she's absolutely the type to administer swift kicks as needed.
He really is in too deep, beyond return. So is Molly, she just hides it better and is less sentimental than Fitz is. Mariah is a selfish brat, really. Not evil, just extremely self-centered.
Beathan wants a big garden! I picture her as Scottish born and raised but at heart is one of those people who'd live in a tropical paradise surrounded by an abundance of plants.
Jinks has probably had water thrown on him to wake him up before. He's a napper. He naps everywhere. haha. I love writing Jinks, he's a hoot.
No, he did not need another way of being loud! hahaha... Between him shouting and McCormack's whistles, the team needs hearing protection.
I'm not much for the "Quidditch-toned muscles" idea, but yeah especially at a professional level, I think you'd have to have good leg and core muscles to stay on the broom, and good upper-body as well for flying one-handed while throwing/carrying the Quaffle, that kind of thing. Not to mention balance! I figure they're all in the gym regularly to tone up, especially the Beaters.
More to come on Fitz and Rakes! Stay tuned. And yes, he should not take it out on Molly, when she's just trying to help. He lashes out, but Molly won't take that.
Thank you for the review!