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Review:patronus_charm says:
House Cup 2014 Review

Omg, I am so excited for this task as I can finally attack your page so whoo, here I go, Sian :D

Ok, first of all I really love how you used the quote because you tied it in so well with the narration at the beginning of this chapter with the way Lavender referred to herself in third person POV. I canít really explain why I liked it, but it just worked so well and it was a really great technique. Then again you told it all together so well with the way you included the flashbacks of the war, so we really got the full picture of Lavenderís life.

Another thing I loved was how disconnected Lavender became. Ok, that sounds a little mean but it just worked so well, because while Parvati said that other people fought too, I always imagined it to be harder for Lavender as she got bitten and that worked so well and yeah it was just fab. It really was quite sad at times too when she reflected on reading tea leaves and the whole Won Won thing because she wanted that old self back so desperately but she just couldnít get it and she knew that which was why she was in this darkness, and I had way tooo many feels at that point!

I really liked the glimpse of happiness at the end with the way her and Parvati began to get in touch again with the letters and her little brother Charlie is so cute, and I want more of him. It just showed that there could be hope and happiness for her and I really liked that! Onto the next chapter :D

-Kiana

Author's Response: Hey Kiana! I love that we had the same idea of review bombing each other during the house cup, although I'm a bit slower responding than you managed!

I'm really pleased you liked the way I incorporated the quote as this one just jumped out at me and wanted me to write a story about Lavender, for some reason. Switching between third person and first in the opening wasn't something I'd tried before but I really enjoyed it and I'm glad that you did too!

Haha it doesn't sound mean at all, I think both of us like putting Lavender through a lot of suffering in our stories :P I always imagine her as having gone through a lot more after the war as well, because being bitten meant that she was probably quite close to death - at least, that's how I imagine it. At this point she really feels disconnected from the person that she used to be, but knows that she used to be happy and can't get back to that, which makes things worse.

Yay, I'm glad you liked the happier ending to this chapter! Charlie was a character who invented and wrote himself in this story and it was nice to give Lavender a bit of hope after having such a hard time so far!

Thanks for the review!


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