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Review:Roisin says:
Aha, another great chapter. This story is moving really well.

I loved seeing Harry from other people's POV. You got him exactly right, and Justin's perspective on his behavior was really great.

Again, you managed to pull on-the-nose comedy into a serious situation (Ron's suit), and the way you weave past experiences into dialogue (Justin's family on the run) was masterful.

The melodrama I noted last chapter with Bizzy wasn't at all an issue here. As for the son's death, it was treated with a light hand, and that's precisely what it needed. I also like that you don't shy away from that kind of brutality--war is supposed to be terrible.

Your chapters continue to be really gripping, and easy to get sucked in to. I think the best storytelling is the kind where you don't even notice the writing, and see the story instead. You totally accomplished that.

I saw one or two little errors, nothing I can recall, but I'd recommend reading your chapters out loud to catch them.

And as a last note, you do a really wonderful job of letting these characters be very young. Brave, to be sure, but young.

This post-war story is so strong, I'm inclined to feel like it's a proper continuation on the Potter series.

My hat off to you!

Author's Response: Yes! Catching up!

I liked doing this chapter from Justin's point of view, even though it wasn't the original plan. He brings a lot to the table, I think: muggle-born, not part of the Trio and from a very different walk of life than Ron or Harry.

I'm really glad you thought I handled Donny's death well. I knew I couldn't overdo it, or nothing else in the chapter would make any impact. This story has been kind of a bloodbath so far, but that's what seems to happen when you write about Death Eaters.

I don't think I'd be doing anyone any favors -- the characters included -- if I made them grow up prematurely. That's not to say that they can't have flashes of it, but they're not 30 years old. They shouldn't behave like it.

Wow, that is very high praise, and I appreciate it! Thanks for reading and reviewing!


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