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Review:HeyMrsPotter says:
I'm finally back for more of your wonderful story! The next chapter is MORE shocking? How much more shocking than Ron and Hermione possibly being alive does it get?!?!

I love that you gave Rose a little break and it was nice to read her having an almost normal moment (I say almost cause let's face it, it was dinner with the Malfoys!) I really liked her interactions with Scorpius-their not-flirting is too funny. And Draco was just so perfect, his behaviour suggests he changed as I always suspected he did after the war, but not so much that he was out of character.

There was a little grammar thing I picked up on in your speech. Generally at the end of speech, if it is followed by 'Rose said' or 'Scorpius replied' etc, (i.e. if it is describing how the speech was spoken and who by) then the punctuation at the end of the spoken words is a comma rather than a full stop:
"Don't be silly, darling," Astoria said kindly.
"Not hungry," she murmured. (unless the word following the speech is a name or an I, then that should begin with a lowercase letter)
There are some parts where the speech is punctuated correctly and some where it isn't, so you may want to give it a once over :)

That doesn't distract from this chapter being as wonderful as all of the rest though :D

Author's Response: Hey there!

It was funny exploring a 'dinner witht he Malfoys' in the context of this story. I was iffy about Draco but I feel like he would be the person who understands most what Rose is going through.

thanks so much for the grammar bits! I get so lazy about that stuff and I probably do need to give it a once over.

Thanks so much for. as always, a wonderful review!

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