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Review:jessicalorewrites says:
Hey, I'm here because you requested a review on my topic! Sorry it took forever, I forgot to check my review thread. First off I'm going to answer your area of concern and add in my own little thoughts about different things that I like along the way :)

1. Plot
Obviously there's not much of a substantial plot yet, this being the first chapter, but from what I have read this seems like it's going to be interesting when it does develop! The characters + your writing all have my intrigued as to what and how it will happen next. Also, I love the suspense of the last line!!

2. Characters
For a girl with such a strong obsession as Aeris has, she is surprisingly not as annoying as I usually find characters like her. Definitely remember to steer clear from most Mary Sue tropes but other than that I really like her character - and Harley's too! And your James Potter is fabulous. Excellent well done!

3. Structure/Flow
Lemme say something right now, I LOVED THE FIRST PARAGRAPH!! Usually super long descriptions are thoughtless and boring but this one actually got me interested in James as a character. Also, coupled with Aeris' obsession for him, it actually plays well into the flow of the story.

Overall a good read :) I can't wait to see how you develop everything in the next chapter/s! I'll review your second chapter for you when I get the time I promise :)

- Jess xo

Author's Response: Thank you for filling the requested review! And I totally understand, life is busy. =)

You are right, this first chapter isn't huge, eventful or anything like that. I did want to set it up.
I don't want readers to find her annoying, maybe a little frustrating, like UGH WHY ARE YOU DOING THAT GIRL! Ah, no. She definitely WON'T be a MARY SUE, considering life is almost never in anyone's favor.
I'm glad you like it. The description of James is to see from Aries' POV.

Anyway, thanks so much again!

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