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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hi Erin, this is my attempt of getting through all the Claw entries in one evening so sorry for a speedy review!

I loved how you showed the sinister air from a childís eyes as it added new light to it and made it even more scary somehow as a child can never really fully comprehend a situation such as this but sees it in a different light and it just made me think a lot. It really was quite scary though how everyone just kept on dying with no real reason, I guess that must be due to the horrible limbo of being a squib. You canít just accept things as they are as you have an inkling there is something more yet you donít know what the more is and you showed all of that complexity really well.

Just to say quickly, whenever I read a new piece by you Iím always surprised by how much youíve improved since the last one and it was the same again here. You really focused on the inner emotional and psychological conflict and it just added another layer to the story which was great. You also focused on your descriptions a lot more too and they have just improved so much since last time.

The ending was great because the girl almost seemed sinister too with the way she wanted to wreak havoc on the world in revenge for everything and Iím almost worried what she might get up to next but then it was great to see she was strong enough to change her views on things.

There were a few places you forgot to capitalise Mum and Dad when it should have been but thatís understandable given how speed was needed here, but other than that it was a great entry!


Author's Response: Whoo, you're so fab Kiana! And you've inspired me to finally start trudging my way through all the unanswered reviews. :P

I don't even know how I wrote this. It's been a while since I wrote something in a single setting. I actually just started typing something out on my phone and it turned into this somehow. If only I could write fast everyday.

Honestly, the plot was inspired by a nightmare I had, which is why the MC turned out to be a squib. I tried to make the language simple and gradually a bit more sophisticated to show the difference in ages. I'm so happy it made you think about stuff from that perspective!

Oh yeah, I used my obsession with obsessions to write that ending. :P I like thinking about various psychological aspects of people's lives, and they're usually integrated in most of my fics.

Thanks for letting me know! I'll go back to correct the ones I missed out soon! And thank you for the lovely, quite detailed review even though you were in a hurry. ily. :)

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