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Review:ScarletEye158 says:
Hey Lauren! I'm here to read and review your story for the Writing Challenge!

I have to say, I'm pretty shocked that all 4 of you guys focused your story around Pansy lol. I've never read so many stories about her in my life! It was really cool how they were all so different though!

I really liked the way that you started the story without telling who was speaking/thinking and without saying who that person was thinking about. It made me really want to read more and kept me super interested!

I feel so bad for Pansy in your story! The poor girl really must have loved Draco :( I thought it was really powerful and made it seem very realistic to have her destroying all of the possessions in her room. I can totally picture her doing that and the way you wrote it made me be able to see it perfectly!

And by the way, your descriptions in this story were spot on! Seriously, I loved reading the way you described Draco, how the room looked, and especially how Pansy was feeling - it made the story so interesting and I loved how it was more of the "show" of a story instead of the "tell"!

Aw the poor house elf! You could clearly see how miserable he was at being asked to do something he didn't want to do, but with the threat of clothes, he must've felt helpless!

I thought it was really cool how you showed the flashback of Pansy with the remembrall. It was a really good foreshadowing scene and I have to admit I was kind of confused about what she asked the House Elf to do until I read the remebrall scene over again :p She must have been really desperate to forget everything by having her ask the House Elf to wipe her memory - I can't imagine wanting to forget about everything in your life!

I love how you incorporated the invitation at the end! I was really curious as to what the letter said throughout the story so I'm glad I got to see it! I can't believe Draco and Astoria would send that to her, though. They had to have known how much Pansy loved Draco, right? What jerks!

anyways, this was a really good one-shot! I'm glad I got to read it and I just wanted to say congrats on using the prompts successfully, you did really well with incorporating them all :)

-Amanda

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