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Review:ScarletEye158 says:
Hey Kevin! We haven't actually met, but I see you around the CR all the time and wanted to come review your Writing Challenge story :)

This was a brilliant story! I was a little bit confused at different parts (probably because I'm a slow person) but as I read on I realized what was going on and I wasn't too confused anymore :p I really liked how you showed Pansy as a young girl and all of her memories. Those are real memories, right? I thought they were through the whole story, but then at the end I was kind of left wondering if those were real or made up ones from having her memory erased.

The courting part with the two families was perfect in my opinion! Pure blood families and their traditions are always so interesting to me so I really really liked what you did with it! It seemed like a very realistic situation :)

Wow, the ending really got me! I didn't expect Astoria to have wiped and changed her memory! I'm assuming the time in St. Mungo's wasn't the first time, right? I think there was at least one other time and that was when Astoria told her the Draco had called off the engagement? She must have had to change Draco's memory too, then, huh?

I usually only see Astoria portrayed as a really nice character, someone who isn't a typical cunning Slytherin, so I really like that she was different in your story! It was really refreshing and nice to read her that way! And in contrast, I only really read Pansy as being an evil, cunning character, so it was cool to see them flipped! I felt really bad for Pansy (Which is something I never thought I would say! haha) I thought it was pretty cool that her memory started to come back after her head injury and Astoria must have been livid because she thought she had wiped her memory for good!

All in all, I really liked this story! I might have to read it again so that I can go back and look for all of the foreshadowing and clues because I bet it'll all make a looot more sense then :P

Nice job on using a lot of the prompts, too! They all worked really nicely with your story!

-Amanda

Author's Response: Howdy Amanda! Thanks for the thoughtful and kind review!

You are definitely not the first person to be a little confused on the first read. Part of that was deliberate because I wanted to keep people unaware of what exactly was really going on, but I think looking back perhaps in some cases the transitions were too sharp/abrupt and that contributed to the confusion. I wanted a bit of that vibe, but maybe it just went too far at times.

As for the childhood memories though, those are absolutely real memories. They were born out of one of the purposes of the story, which was to explore how Pansy became who she was. Originally that's all I intended the story to be about, but when I saw the Remembrall as a prompt, I switched things up a bit to include the memory element which gave rise to...

Dark Astoria! That was another thing I wanted to do with the story once I settled on the overall plot idea. Since I was exploring Pansy (who because of who she represented to JKR was left very one-dimensional in canon) I wanted to make people think about her more and decided with the other elements (like memory) I could also turn what seems to be a common view of Astoria on its head for fun. You should be proud of yourself for picking up on Draco though! Yes, Astoria also modified Draco's memories. And this modification on Pansy DEFINITELY wasn't the first time. I decided not to explore this more, but the reason for Pansy's memory problems is actually that she's had her memory modified by Astoria SO MANY times. My idea for the WHY of that was two-fold: (1) Astoria wasn't very good at memory charms and (2) despite possible evidence to the contrary with Hermione's modification of her parents' memories (depending on how you look at that), memories tied to love are "harder" the modify (this is just my head canon :p).

Because of the confusion though, I may actually write a companion piece from Astoria's POV as either a one-shot or short story which will explore some of these things on a deeper level.

Thanks again from reading and reviewing! I'm glad you liked it!


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