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Review:Veritaserum27 says:
Hi Lindsey, here for the review swap!

So, we finally get to see what was going on with Draco! I thought he was acting really suspicious when he and Hermione visited that woman. I actually feel really bad for him. That whole scene was written really well.

At the end of this chapter Draco comments to himself that he thinks Azkaban changed him, but I think he had a conscience all along. He may not want to admit it, but he has a good heart.

I need to comment on your pacing of this story. It is excellent. Too many authors try to just jump right into getting Hermione and Draco together. Either that or they try to make Draco into someone who is totally different from the books. You have given him believable qualities and, at the same time, not taken away the pure blood in him.

Astoria. Ugh. She is nasty, selfish and mean. I think Draco realizes this already but isn't sure what to do, because he is expected to marry her.

I also like the way you interjected little hints of Draco caring about Hermione. It is really subtle and again, paced really well.

In addition, I wanted to comment on your use of descriptions. For example, you started the chapter with a freezing night and ended it with a hot shower. Both events were the extremes and both were painful for Draco. Excellent use of literary elements. This chapter was about Draco's pain and you did a great job with it!

Thanks for doing a review swap!

Beth

Author's Response: Hey Beth,
Eeek, thank you so much for the nice review!
I am so glad that you enjoyed reading this and that you think I am doing a good job so far. That makes me happy!!! I think my writing has def improved since my past stories. I hope you continue to read on eventually. Thank you!
-Lindsey


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