Once again, I'm so sorry and so embarrassed about the review situation.
Hey!! Alcase-Lorraine! Heey.
Okay, so those opening paragraphs were really beautifully written. It seems that the words you got for the challenge aren't bolded, and I'm curious to see which ones you were assigned and what you added to make the style work. I like that you adopted a higher diction for the entire story, rather than just using the words you were given for the challenge. They could've stuck out a lot, but you make the whole thing flow.
Who is this? It's Albania, which is where Voldemort was hiding out. But this doesn't seems like it's him. Quirrel?
The barmaid is really awesome. She's not there for very long, but in that time you gave her mulitple dimensions. It was really nice.
I'm sticking with my gut and saying that I think it's Quirrel. Yes! I was right!!
Okay. This was awesome. Go you!!! I love your portrayal of Quirrel. It makes sense (and it's also very sad) that he went from this really arrogant, brave guy to... well... Quirrel. It also speaks to how powerful Voldy was, even in his... deadish years.
Once again, this was really fantasticly well written. You gave excellent description, and it's clear that you took your time writing this.
You made it so clear at the end, how sure he was about his fate. And... how wildly wrong he was. It's a sad beginning to his story.
Again, I'm so sorry about these reviews. So sorry!!!
This was a fantastic one-shot, though.
Author's Response: Hi! Don't be embarrassed--it's taken me a long time to respond!
Yep, I picked Alcaise-Lorraine because we learned about it in school a few years ago. At the time I wrote this, I didn't really know any other regions of France that aren't Paris. (But that's changed, thanks to Suite francaise!) :)
Thank you!! I'm glad you liked the flow of the piece. When I first posted it, I had no idea how to put the words in bold (I was still a newbie on the site, hah). I need to fix that!
Yep, you guessed it! It's Quirrel!! I have a habit of not revealing the name of my characters until the last minute, haha.
I like strong female characters!! I don't think I could make myself write a girl who was meant to be subservient or subordinate to a male. When I wrote the barmaid, I pictured her to be a bitter girl who has been through a lot of nasty stuff, and she wasn't going to let some stranger push her around. :)
I think I started to understand Quirrel a little bit better after writing this. (Well, I understand my version of him, at least!) If nothing else, his complete one-eighty in personality is a testament to how awful Voldemort really was. (Dead-ish years, yes!)
Thank you so very much! I did take a lot of time to write this because I wanted to make sure that I was using the words correctly. :D
Oh, he was so, so wrong! Poor Quirrel...
Again, IT'S FINE. I'm just glad that you're reviewing my stories. I don't mind waiting for reviews. :)