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Review:awesomepotter says:
Hey there! I'm here for our lovely review swap :)
I'm just going to start by congratulating you on writing in second person! You maintained it really well throughout the piece, and I think it really suits the situation because you used it so effectively. I'm terrible at second person, so big clap ;)
I really like Fleur's worries about the dress - her insecurities really show how nervous she is and also how strongly she feels for Bill all without actually stating it, especially when you talk about how confident she usually is and how easy a decision her wardrobe is most of the time. I love how she worries about the colour of the dress being the same colour as Bill's hair, only for Bill to give her an orange rose. I can't quite explain why, but I really liked that and found it quite endearingly sweet. It's funny how she seems to be confident and elegant in his presence, yet as soon as he isn't she starts overthinking things and allowing her mind to run away with itself, overthinking things.
It's really lovely how you've kept things bare, as well - leaving most of the details like places and people out of the piece so we can really focus on Fleur's thoughts and the interaction between the two main characters. Allowing us really see how Fleur is thinking during this piece definitely makes it a very interesting one-shot.
I'm afraid I will have to confess that I'm terrible at reviews, and especially the constructive criticism part. I'm usually so overawed at the standard of the writing that I simply can't think of any way in which it could be better (as I am with this one!) Congratulations on the wonderful work, I really did enjoy reading your piece. Sorry the review is so short, but like I said, I did really love it and I can;t think of any way in which I could have loved it more!

Thanks for such a lovely story,
awesomepotter xxx

Author's Response: Hey there - thanks so much for the review and for the swap! It was so much fun to do! :)

Thanks! :) I actually really like writing in second person, and it just seemed to fit so well with this when I started writing, so I just went with it :P I'm glad you like it, though!

I'm so happy you liked Fleur - she's one of those characters people love to hate, I think, and I really loved writing her in this because Bill and Fleur are one of those couples I love. I wanted to show her as less perfect than people often show her to be, hence the dress confusion and all - plus it tied in rather neatly with the colour and emotion from the challenge, so I can't claim total credit for that ;) Haha, the orange rose - yeah, I couldn't resist! Also, again, it helped with the colour theme, so not all mine, in a sense! Omigosh, I'm so glad you liked it being so kinda stripped back, because I'm so bad at writing short things - I usually write really long things - so this was such a challenge for me.

Aww, no, no worries about any of it! This was such a lovely review to get, and such a great swap to do - so thank you again for both of them, and I'm so glad you enjoyed it! :)

Aph xx

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