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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hi there!

Wow, I thought considering the whole chapter was 500 words, this was an excellent character study of Salazar! I really liked the idea of his father and how he was this hero and how Salazar looked up to him, as it showed how much power had played a role in his life from the beginning and perhaps shows why he was so against Muggleborns because by dominating him he would get power and it was just really interesting to analyse.

The use of second person POV was really excellent here as it showed a new side to Salazar with the way it times it felt as if the narrator was talking to him and encouraging him along and that level of complexity was really cool. Also, it made the story seem almost poetic and enchanting and added to the descriptions!

I really liked the bit when you mentioned why he joined the school as there were some very ominous undertones there with the way he was talking about how they would see the importance of blood purity later on. Speaking more of the ominous notes, you did a really good job weaving them in throughout the story that we really got to see the cold and calculating side to Salazar.

I canít think of much else to say but this was a really fantastic chapter and insight into his mind!

-Kiana

Author's Response: Hello!

Before I wrote this, I hadn't really thought much about Salazar Slytherin, pre-Hogwarts and pre-schism. When I sat down to write about him, I wanted an explanation for his "evil"-ness that is shown so often. His father seemed to offer that explanation for me. Like Draco Malfoy, Salazar was influenced by the views of his father. He knew no other life, and there was no one around to open his eyes until he was far too set in his thinking. Also, believing that the Muggles were the reason for the crumbling of the House of Slytherin sort of added to it...

Thank you!! It was my first attempt at second person PoV, so I'm super pleased to hear that you thought it was good. Oooh, poetic?! I didn't mean to do that, but gosh, thanks!! I'm blushing. ^.^

I tried to weave in the foreshadowing for what we all know will be his departure from the school in such a way that it didn't overwhelm the original intent of the story. After all, this is only the beginning of Hogwarts, so his awful departure is yet to come. :)

Thanks so much for your awesome review! :D

~UnluckyStar57


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