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Review:Ravenclaw333 says:
Wow. Just - wow. Your characters really do have some horror in their backstories, don't they?

This memory was really well done - you can hear Scorpius's voice as a fifteen-year-old coming through the memory, and the accident really comes out of nowhere, making the shock he feels that much more real. Prefacing it with his fight with his parents and his annoyance with the Muggle neighbour just adds to that shock, and his guilt at leaving his parents after an argument is obvious by the way he remembers the day so many years later.

The details you've added about him and Rose show a new dimension of their relationship - the fact that he still has feelings for her, and once again calling to mind their history together. And the line "She touched me, and let me touch her" seems so simple, but says so much - the fact that he's noticed something's wrong, and that until now she hasn't let him touch her at all - it's very telling. Wonderful chapter, and I really enjoyed this insight into Scorpius's POV.

Author's Response: Hi!

Thank you for this amazing review! Yeah, I have damaged Rose and Scorp, huh? I really wanted them to need each other on a deeper level. I want them to help bring each other back from their horrible pasts. Hopefully, it will happen :)

Thanks for noticing the details. I'm glad it was a shock to you - that's what I was going for - yay! I was so excited to see that you felt the memory was well done. This was something that I was concerned about (mainly because I am the furthest thing from a 15-year old pure blood wizard that you could possibly get).

I hope you continue reading! I really value your reviews.


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