Saw this was posted and I had to read it before bed!
There is much to talk about in this chapter! Finally we get to see Harry and Ron. And several others. It was so great to see all of the old DA gang back together again! I felt so nostalgic seeing Terry, Susan, Neville and the others.
But, I can see how the aurors are not taking it well. I mean, it is their job to catch the death eaters and here comes a bunch of punk kids taking over. Sounds like a recipe for disaster down the line. I can see the senior aurors resenting how this group of kids got to skip over all the required training and get a free pass to fight bad guys.
So, I am really, REALLY hoping that nothing happened to little Donny. I'm not thrilled that the dog was murdered, but I don't think I could handle that with the kid.
I really liked your descriptions of how Harry runs his group of death hunters. Not much time to make plans. You've characterized Harry really well here, he doesn't like to be the leader, but he accepts it. He feels a duty to rid the world of the remaining death eaters, who pose a threat to both muggles and wizards alike.
Poor, poor Bizzy. I think she was Harry's informant. I may be going for the obvious here, but it seemed like she was the one who led the death hunters to that house.
I did find one technical error (I think). In the very first part, where Neville is examining the broken wine bottle portkey, the last sentence reads After noting the pattern and colors of the flashes of light, he dropping it into an evidence bag. I think you might mean "dropped" instead of "dropping." Not sure.
I really like that this was written as Ron's POV. It was a good way to tell this part of the story, especially because he and Harry are so close.
You left us with some seriously wounded death hunters. I hope that Harry and Ron aren't too hurt!
Great chapter. Looking forward to the next one!
Author's Response: Hi, Beth! I am so determined to knock out these unanswered reviews today. You know, so I can then stare at the zero obsessively for a few days, refreshing the page often. ;)
Bringing members of the D.A. back together in the post-war Auror department has always been something I enjoy. Harry and Ron were obvious from canon, and Neville was also supposed to have spent some time with the Aurors before returning to Hogwarts to teach. Susan, Justin and Terry were characters I picked because I felt like they balanced out the team. Not everyone can be a headstrong, daredevil Gryffindor.
Nope the remaining senior Aurors from before the war don't take it well at all. As far as they're concerned, Harry and his team have had life handed to them on a silver platter. Strange how they manage to overlook that whole "surviving Voldemort and his Death Eaters" thing. It's a convenient oversight for them, however. Being an Auror is a very prestigious job and the Auror Department has seen more than its fair share of past members ascend to the Minister's office. I'm sure they hate the idea of being leap-frogged by these kids who haven't "paid their dues".
So Donny... yeah, more on him later.
I think Harry is very used to running things by the seat of his pants. Not that they don't make the most of the opportunity to train and plan when it's there, but when they get a hot lead on a fugitive, they have to move fast.
I felt awful doing that to poor Bizzy, but in the end death made her happier than the life she was living. You're correct that she was the informant. That gets covered a bit in the next chapter.
Thanks for pointing out that typo! I'll get that cleaned up.
I'm trying to save Harry's PoV for the last chapter. I think it will make the biggest impact there.
You'll find out soon what kind of shape Ron and Harry are in. Obviously they're not dead, because that would pretty much mean the end of the story. ;)
Thanks for reading and reviewing!