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Review:Veritaserum27 says:
Hi!

I'm here for the BvB review battle.

I went back to re-read chapter one because your story is so intricate that I wanted to make sure I was on the right page coming into this chapter.

I feel like Barty is a real sneaky fellow. He is tyring to recruit Sirius, but I'm not sure why, since he is Regulus's best freind. I have a feeling that he is trying to trip people up and distract them from his real agenda.

I really liked the part where Sirius trips on the stairs. We see how he is really still a boy in many respects and struggling with his identity. He seems to like being a Gryffindor, but still wants to be part of the black family.

You got Bella's character spot on. She is crazy and heartless - a bad combination. I really liked how you described her as not ever getting the proper balance of sugar and spice. Very clever.

Lots of questions about peoples actions here.

Where is Orion? He told Pollux he was checking on the boys, but is nowhere to be found.

Why did Regulus lie to Sirius about the healers coming? Perhaps he saw someone else enter the house and thought it was the healers, or maybe he was just lying.

Why did Pollux want the healers to come so quickly and why wouldn't he let Sirius see Cygnus? Is he hiding something?

What is Bella hiding behind the locked door?

I ponder as I head off to the next chapter.

Beth

Author's Response: Hi Beth! Thanks so much for stopping by - and I'm so sorry for the late response (I'm so bad at review responses! I'm trying to get better...)! :)

Barty is really creepy, haha, but it's just too much fun to write! :) But yeah, he may be trying to distract people from his agenda, or he may just be winding people up - who knows? ;)

Sirius... since he's only sixteen, I kinda wanted to try and get that mix between thinking you're an adult, but not actually being one, and kinda try and get at what happens when you're put in a situation you can't really handle. I'm so glad you like him, though - I know the way I wrote him here is different to other Siriuses (Siriusii?) out there!

Haha, thank you so much! :) Bella is an amazing character to write - there's so much freedom with her!

Ooh, I'm glad you have questions :P Though, honestly, I can't really answer any of them - though Orion isn't checking on the boys because there's been a time jump since the first chapter, so that's why ;) Sorry if it wasn't clear! As for the rest... I really can't say anything, sorry! :)

Thank you so much for the lovely review - I'm so glad you're enjoying it! :)

Aph xx


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