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Review:Infinityx says:
Hello, I'm back! Here for the review tag.

I like what you've going on here. There are a lot of elements that come together and help expand the plot.

I really like the way you've written Hermione. You've given her a formal, assertive tone when she's working, which is keeping with her character. She's also civil to Malfoy since it's her job to mentor him, no matter how much she might not want to. I like how you've kept her character true to canon as well as adapt her to fit your story. Good job there!

I found it a little stretched that Malfoy just happened to move into the house next to hers. I realize that it's probably necessary for the plot to have them in close proximity and interact more, as well as to be privy to each other's personal lives, but make sure you keep a conscious watch on what seems realistic and what doesn't. Since you've made them neighbours, I expect some interesting interactions between them!

It's really sad how Draco's always shadowed by his past deeds. I'm sure he didn't really want to do anything but was made to for the sake of his family. I hope he comes to terms with them soon. I'm quite happy with the way you characterized him as well. You haven't made him become an angel, but kept him true to his nature.

Great chapter! Like I said before, make sure you keep your tenses consistent and check your spellings. :)

~Erin

Author's Response: Hey Erin,
Thanks so much for swinging by and giving me another awesome review!
:)


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