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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hi Avi, as you didnít say which story you wanted to be reviewed I chose this so hopefully thatís fine!

I used to be a massive Dramione fan but now I only read it now and then, so Iím so glad that I decided to read yours as it was such a great story! There was just something so special about the way you wrote them, it started off with the feeling of innocence and that this wasnít something which really going to go far but then gradually deepened into something meaning it went really well with all the drama going in their actual lives too.

One thing I think which made it for me was how Hermioneís thoughts always went back to how this wasnít really meant to be and how she couldnít almost believe this was happening as it made it so much more realistic for me. It kept her in character with her remembering his past and her own and how they almost shouldnít be together and that tied in well with the element of secrecy they had as if only they could understand their relationship and other people wouldnít be able to fathom it.

The overall structure of the story was really great too and added so much to it. With the short sentences it felt as if it almost had a rhythm to it and showed how their relationship had this sort of unbelievable and magical element to it. I loved the way you just showed short segments of their relationship together too as I really got to see how they developed because of it. Ooh finally, the italics were a lovely touch and it just added a new layer to the story and I really enjoyed them being there.

This was a really good read, Avi!

-Kiana

Author's Response: Hi Kiana!

Oh... I totally forgot about the review :) Sorry! Hehe. And it's fine that you chose the story you wanted to review! No problems :)

Really? I wouldn't have guessed that at all :D haha.
I'm so glad you liked my story, it took me a month to write - on/off. Just trying to writing a story with a not-so-sad ending, as I've been quite productive in those horror/dark genre stories lately :)
I really did try to keep it as natural as possible, even though it was in the fluffy, romantic genre - and with them being enemies, I still wanted Hermione to be reminded of their differences. I'm so glad you noticed!
This was certainly a different writing style than I used to write in, and it seems to be very well recieved - which makes me quite happy :)

Thank you so much for reviewing this story! And it was such a fun challenge you had :)
I'm sorry if my response seem a little short, in contrast to your lovely review! I just woke up from a nap, hehe.

- Avi


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