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Review:patronus_charm says:
Whoo, Iím finally back and start leaving you reviews and once again you left me thinking!

Letís start with Roxanne and can I say how much I love her? She has this wonderful energy about her which is so chatty and lively but not annoying at the same time. Her narration is so captivating it left me hooked throughout as she just makes such refreshing observations and has wit about her too that I could just read her thoughts for ages. I also really liked how you weaved in Lucy and James too as that allowed me to see her in a different context and just get a glimpse of family dynamics.

Thackeray is possible one of the most original characters Iíve seen! I loved the idea of HEPS it sounds like so much fun and it does make sense that in the next gen world they would start to tackle social issues, and all of the different schemes had me laughing. Now, here comes to the confusing bit as I donít know whether to call Thackeray he or she, but either way I really liked that you explored this side as it was so interesting and different. You really have done a good way of showing how Thackeray could be male and female and that really must have taken some skill!

I love Thackeray and Roxanneís relationship as itís just so unique! I can sense some tension lurking away there with how Thackeray doesnít approve of Roxanneís boyfriend and how he/she (ah, Iíll use both so not to offend!) banned him from the meetings. I guess there could be two possibilities with Roxanne being one of Thackerayís few friends so she/he wants to keep him close, or perhaps some romantic feeling is lying away there. Iím leaning more to the latter which would be really interesting given all the gender issues.

Anyhow, a very captivating first chapter, Jenna!


Author's Response: Hi Kiana! :)

Ah, I'm so glad you like Roxy! She was such a surprise to me as I didn't plan her out at all but I ended up really liking her. She's quite friendly but more shy and uncertain than other main characters I've written which is very fun to explore. The cousin dynamics were quite fun to write as well and I thought they were all such cute cousin-friends.

I'm so excited to hear you like Thackeray, who is just a crazy character and who I loved so much that I just had to write more about! :P It's good to know you found HEPS believable, and it was fun imagining all the things they would protest at Hogwarts: my sister and I had a laugh making this long list one night. Ah, the pronoun confusion tends to get people when reviewing this story, I've noticed. :P Strangely, it felt more natural and by the end I was just leaving Thackeray's gender ambiguous without any thought. I think because though I have an idea of Thackeray's birth gender and gender identity, I change my mind on it sometimes, so there's no right or wrong answer really. Thackeray could be either male or female or fall somewhere on the spectrum and it wouldn't really affect the character or the story.

Definitely some tension haha, but Roxy doesn't really like her boyfriend much anyway. :P Thackeray does have some possessive tendencies to be fair, which would bother Roxy eventually because of how she's quite independent.

Thanks so much for all the lovely reviews, Kiana! :D I hope to get the other replies posted very soon!

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