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Review:ReeBee says:
Hi there! Wow! this was so good! amazing! I LOVE your writing style! really, its gorgeous! Anyway, onto the review :)

Characterisation: quite a good start! really intriguing! :D And Ms Blanc really sounds interesting! Her personality I already love her! And I must say, I noticed something really interesting (not sure if this is intended :P ) she says thank you, when she declines the water! I really liked that somehow! It really provided as a clear contrast between the two sides! And well, we obviously don't know a lot about her, but in this story it worked! really! it provided a strong base and the suspense kills!

Description: Wow, you're very very talented! Description wise, it was beautiful! Honestly couldn't look away and I could picture and hear Selwyn and Jugson's voices in my mind! Really vivid! I really loved the description! I found myself rereading lines just to experience the beauty and vividness again! :D The beginning! Beautiful! Its so original! Wow! It was honestly just :O The only thing I'd recommend is maybe a bit more on the atmosphere of the house and the room. Like, i can imagine it as cold and sort of harsh and severe, but I'd love to see it in writing :)

Plot: Great! Honestly! Wowww! Im hooked! So interesting! wHO is this girl?! why is she here?! omg! and whats with the holy grail thing?! how did she get here?! I don't know! But id love to know! :D Its awesome!

Grammar/Syntax: it was good! No major errors, i just found that some sentences were really long and maybe you could add more commas and make shorter sentences? Other than that it was perfect :)

I really enjoyed this and really hope i get some time to come back to this! Thank you for the review swap! :D

-Curie :)

Author's Response: Hi there!

Wow! This is such a lovely review and I'm just in the middle of writing yours so I hope I can write something equally as nice!

I am so glad you liked it because it really is such a challenge for me to maintain description and characterizations throughout a fic. It's mostly the later chapters where I feel like the description sort of dies down a bit.

The 'Thank You' was added in sort of to add upon the fact that even though 'Ms Blanc' had been kept as a prisoner in these horrible conditions, she was still above all these so called regal people around the table. I'm glad you noticed! :p

Gahhh thank you, honestly so made up to know that my description was OK! (like really really happy). I will definitely be making sure to maintain that for future chapters and may even rewrite a few pieces in here to take on your advice :)

I will admit, in my opinion, the plot branches out a bit (which is both good and meh) because that increases the chances of plot holes right?

I really hope you keep reading though, thank you for the lovely review :)

Bella x

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