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Review:Veritaserum27 says:
Hi Dan!

I know I'm in the middle of Detox, but I hope you don't mind that I just HAD to read this, too!

Great job, as usual. Your depictions of the scenes are so detailed, I felt like I was there. How do you do it?

I'd like to congratulate you on your original character. Kaspar is one scary dude. He seems to be more evil and morally corrupt than your average death eater. Most of the British death eaters are muggle-haters, but they seem to feel the need to maintain a sense of decorum. Kaspar does not. Murder, rape, unforgivable curses - he uses these for entertainment purposes. And, at this point, he has nothing to lose. All of that adds up to one dangerous villain.

So, Mary was in on the whole thing, but I'm not sure if she is a muggle who works with the auror department to collaborate in catching wizards who are dangerous to both muggle and wizard society OR if she is an auror in disguise (polyjuice potion?). I am thinking that a wizard like Kaspar would have been able to reveal her as magical. Either way, I am curious as to how she was able to shake off (or completely avoid) the imperious curse. Very, very curious.

I liked the way you had the countdown running in Kaspar's head. It added to the anticipation of the scene. At the end of it all, I was cheering for the good guys - they got their man! However, I am sure that you have much more in store for us. It is never that easy.

Loved it!

Beth

Author's Response: Hey, there! I'm happy to see you stop by!

If I have a secret -- and I don't feel like I do, but here goes... -- it would be spending a lot of time trying to imagine myself describing the scene to someone who was interested but wasn't there. What would they need to know to get a picture in their head? What details would be important to capture the moment and get the important facts across?

I love hearing you say that about Kaspar, but in an odd way it also makes me feel a little bad. This is Kaspar's only appearance. I enjoyed coming up with him and fleshing out all of his little evil details and now he's done. It feels like kind of a waste. Maybe he needs his own one-shot or something.

Mary was indeed in on the whole thing and you'll find out the rest of her story in the next chapter. Don't assume too much about her until you read on, I guess. All will be revealed. ;)

I thought the running countdown was something that would stick with Kaspar. He was so close to getting away. So close...

I'm really glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for reading and reviewing!


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