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Review:Aphoride says:
Hey there - dropping by from Blue v Bronze! :)

I'm so so impressed that you did this both in 500 words and also without using the letter 'e'. Both are so hard to do - I'm genuinely scared of attempting to write without using the letter 'e', and writing in 500 words was hard enough! Doing both is like... wow.

I love how you characterised Ron as so caring and so attentive and protective of his daughter. It's such a realistic thing, and really connects with how loyal and family-oriented he is in the books, you know? Plus, it's a kinda stereotypical but so true dad-type thing - to be protective and not stop thinking of their kids as theirs. It's so sweet, though, that that's what you chose to make the focus of this - it's not something I've seen very often.

I really liked how you portrayed Scorpius, as well, and from Ron's perspective too. I liked how Ron wasn't exactly perhaps Scorpius' biggest fan, and all, but did want his daughter to be happy and feel that Scorpius was good for Rose, you know? How Scorpius was a good guy, and Ron was sort of giving him advice, and telling him what to expect and how much he means to Rose and she means to him.

There were a couple of small (as in, really tiny!) grammar mistakes I spotted - 'an' where it should be 'a', for example. They're not any big deal, or anything, but I thought I should mention them anyway! :)

Your writing in this was so gorgeous, too! It flows so beautifully, and the descriptions are wonderful, too. Just really, really nice - this completely deserves its Diadem! :)

So yeah, I really loved this piece! It's so impressive and so sweet, and I love the way you've focused on a relationship which is so important and so present in life but isn't often portrayed in ff. I'm glad I had a chance to read this! :)

Aph xx

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