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Review:Infinityx says:
Hello! Here from the review tag! It's been quite a while since I read something of yours, and this was a wonderful first chapter!

I love the way you've described the pregnancy test. The other stories I've read with pregnancy in them always had the muggle test or the wave of a wand. This was a nice change and described really well!

I'm so glad this wasn't like most other stories where Ron's always at fault and they break up because of him. Hermione seems to be out of it, and with the way Ron kissed and spoke to her in the end, it seems like he still loves her. I would love it if they would work things out. I've surprisingly grown rather fond of that pairing recently.

I think your characterisations are great here. The way you've introduced all the characters was smooth and lovely.

Ugh, why does Lavender have to call him won won?! I don't like her one bit. I hope things don't blow up between Ron and Hermione though. It would be nice if it held up for a while longer.

The only problems I noticed were with some punctuation, minor spelling errors, and some awkward phrasings of a few sentences. They can easily be fixed though. :)

Great first chapter! I'm going to continue reading now!

~Erin

Author's Response: Hey Erin,
Thank you so much for stopping by! I am glad you like it and want to read on. I did some more editing today so maybe I made it better idk. :)
Eek looking forward to hearing from you.
-Lindsey


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