Hi, Beth! I enjoyed your new chapter immensely, so I figured I should come back and review another one. Soon, I will catch up!
One thing that strikes me again and again as I read this story is what good friends Rose and Scorpius have. I started to say friends and family, but, well, you can’t choose your family. Dom and Selenia have a strong sense of what Rose needs and how Scorpius fits into that equation. Al seems to have a pretty good grasp on what Scorpius needs and at least he stays out of the way where Rose is concerned. That’s about the most you can hope for in a guy. ;)
Poor Scorpius! I mean, I feel like I should say “poor Rose!”, but at least she wasn’t conscious for the post-abduction-attempt trauma. The last of Rose’s secrets is finally out, and it seems to have hit everyone hard. I’m usually not a huge fan of the f-bomb because I think it’s overused in Next Gen stories. Here, it fits the situation perfectly.
I know now that I am completely, irrevocably in love with Rose and I will do anything to keep her safe. -- Well it took you long enough, you big goof!
Albus was just brilliant in this chapter. Brilliant as a friend. Brilliant as an Auror. Brilliant as an exceptionally powerful wizard.
You managed to capture an amazing amount of raw emotion in the barrage of destructive magic Al and Scorpius unleashed. Anger and pain and inadequacy and just plain hurt. Brilliant, beautiful writing.
“Not if I get there first.” I promised. My voice was uneven from the tears and emotion. My Rose. My Rose. I resolved to make this up to her. If I have to, I will spend the rest of my life searching for him, and consoling her. -- I love the statement of unequivocal devotion here.
And my last, and probably favorite, quote from this chapter: ”Scorpius,” she paused at the door and fixed me with a hard stare. “She needs you. You can’t be a wishy-washy _ this time. This is not going to be fixed overnight. Please don’t play the hero for a month and then decide it’s too intense for you.” -- Wow, talk about cutting right to the core of the matter. Yet it seems that Scorpius is ready to hear that message. To embrace it, really. I take this as a very good sign!
Excellent chapter! I didn’t see a thing wrong with it, and there was so much right with it! Great job!
Author's Response: Hi Dan!
Wow. This review caught me off guard. Thank you, thank you. I was having a hard time responding and I think that is why it has taken me so long.
So, confession time: This was actually the very first thing I wrote for this story. I started it here and wrote forward for about four months. Then, I wrote the chapter in Harry's office (The one with Rose and Harry that I accidentally didn't post) and then I wrote the beginning. I've already admitted that I have never written anything before and I am sure that people think this process is weird, but it just sort of happened.
I was really worried that Scorpius came off as a wimp here, so thanks for the vote of confidence.
As far as Al staying out of the way... well, you will see in future chapters that he isn't always so passive. I think, in this case, he is in uncharted waters and is willing to let Scorpius take the lead, for once.
This group is really tight-knit. As far as I see it, Ron, Hermione and Harry would carry their close bond on to their kids. The fact that Scorpius, Rose and Albus were sorted into Ravenclaw made them even closer. And Dom is Rose's closest female cousin, so they have that bond as well - although they are a bit opposite in personality.
Thanks again for such a wonderful review. I look forward to each of your comments!