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Review:randomwriter says:
Hello :) Since I was so late for the review swap, I figured I'd leave you another review :) It's always nice to come back to continue reading stories anyway, and I liked your start.

This chapter wasn't as sad as the previous one, and I really enjoyed the hopeful note the last one ended on, so this was a nice carry forward :) I'm really beginning to love the relationship Teddy and Christian share. It's obviously a much deeper connection as it's just the two of them and Teddy would kind of have to fill in both the roles of a mother and father. It must be so difficult raising a child on his own, holding down a job and taking care of a hundred other things at once, but Teddy seems to be handling it well :)

I felt a little jolt in my heart whenever Victoire was mentioned. I still can't believe what happened to her. It is so, so sad and I'm sure that it must have haunted Teddy forever. It still seems to. I feel so sorry for him, but I get where he's coming from. He must have truly loved Victoire beyond words.

In spite of everything, I think that it's nice that Teddy still gets to meet new people (because of Christian or not). I know it must be incredibly hard for him to even think of ever replacing Victoire, but he does deserve happiness.

I also adore the scenes with Christian and Teddy in the park. It'll be nice to see how much of a role the park plays in both their lives as the plot progresses. Haha :p Teddy seems like he isn't used to sharing attention. But I suspect Christian would be gorgeous. He does have Veela blood AND he is Teddy's son after all (and I always picture Teddy as a handsome bloke! :p)

I do have some CC for you and I hope it does not seem to harsh.

Firstly, I thought the flow was a little choppy. You could improve this by working on your transitions. Try and make them smoother so that the chapter doesn't seem to be filled with many disconnected scenes. Connect the scenes and make them flow into each other and your story will be smoother :) (It will also help you bring up your word count, in case you wanted to!)

Secondly, like the first chapter, this one seemed rushed as well. I suppose this point could be connected to the point about the flow. Just work on your transitions and be a little more descriptive? Talk about Christian's growth and personality development. Delve further into the world of emotions (not just Teddy's, but also Christian's.) These are just a few examples. I think anything descriptive will certainly enhance your story :)

One thing I noticed was that you'd mentioned that Christian did not have Teddy's metamorphmagi abilities. Yet, you mentioned that he has green eyes. Now, as a metamorphmagus, Teddy has the ability to change his eye colour at will. So there seemed to be a small inconsistency there.

This sentence was a bit confusing for me because I think you've interchanged the pronouns :p (oops, happens!)
He had always liked it here when Teddy would bring him, and he knew Christian loved playing in the waves. --> I think this should say that Teddy always liked it when Victoire brought him there? That would make a little more sense to me :p

I also noticed a few typos and punctuation errors. I forgot to mention this earlier, but I noticed a few in the first chapter as well. They aren't to difficult to spot, so I'll leave that to you. I'm sure you can fix them :)

Overall, you've given us another enjoyable chapter (in a totally different way from the previous one) :) It would be great if you could flesh it out. I
still loved it. I totally get why Teddy is still grieving. *I* haven;t totally gotten over Vic's death yet, so seriously. How could he have? Oh, and one thing you seem to get spot on is chapter endings. You just know what's going to hit the hardest, don't you? That last line. Oh WOW. It was perfect and haunting and SO SAD. I LOVED IT!
Keep us the good work :) And thanks for swapping with me!

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