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Review:Veritaserum27 says:
Hello!

I'm here for the review swap!

Wow. There was a lot of back story in this chapter. I understand that it was necessary to build the characters and the plot. Melanie obviously comes from a biased pure blood family. Her overuse of the term "Mudblood" proves that. I noticed that she didn't use it in the second part of the chapter when she was in fifth year. Perhaps she has grown.

I liked the fact that you chose to write a story from the point of view of a Slytherin during the marauders time period. Your portrayal of James and Sirius is pretty accurate and it makes your main characters more sympathetic to know that James and Sirius were frequently the instigators of the pranks upon the Slytherins - not the other way around.

I think you are building to a nice conflict in this story. We know a war is brewing and, although it seems that Melanie doesn't want to take sides, she soon will have to decide.

Thanks for doing the review swap!

~Beth

Author's Response: Hi! Thanks so much for your review!

Yeah, there is a lot of back story in this chapter, I hope it wasn't too much! :S Melanie's family is indeed a little biased, though they're not purebloods... there's more about them later on.

Thank you, I'm glad the premise is interesting! Haha, I don't know if James and Sirius are *always* the instigators.. Melanie is not necessarily an objective narrator :p

it's certainly a difficult time to be growing up in, with war going on. And yes, she thinks she'll have no part in it, but as you said, she can't stay on the fence forever.

Thank you so much for the swap!!


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