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Review:ohmymerlin says:
Hey, there! I'm here from my review thread!

So firstly, I wanted to say that I'd actually read a couple of chapters of this when they first went up and I really enjoyed them but never got the chance to review so I'm glad I got the chance now! :D

So far, it is super interesting! I don't think you need to worry about that now but it is the first chapter so you never know, but I'm sure that it'll be fine!

However, I did notice a teensy little error:

I try to open my eyes and squint through them

That should just be, 'I tried to open my eyes and squinted through them', just to keep up with the past tense of the rest of the story :)

Although, I would probably change the word 'tried' to maybe 'struggled' because tried kind of sounds like she hasn't opened her eyes :)

So far, I think you've written the characterisation well! I really like Violet's personality and although I probably shouldn't get a kick out of her snarkiness and misfortune, I kinda do :P And James seems like a bit of a grump but I'm super interested to see where all of this goes!

This was a brilliant opening chapter, you've definitely set it up well and I'm keen to read more!

Anywho, feel free to request again!

- Kayla :)

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review, Kayla! I really appreciated it :) I definitely struggle with small grammatical errors and thank you for pointing that one out! I will have to go back in and edit that. I should probably just go through it all and edit it... hmm.. too much work! ;)

I am super flattered that you actually read this when it first came out. That means a lot! Maybe I don't suck as much as I feel like I do. Pregnancy hormones can really get the best of you, let me tell ya.

It's probably a bit weird, but I really enjoy writing the grumpiness of Violet and James and the inner turmoil that Violet constantly has.

Again, thanks so much for the review!!

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