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Review:ohmymerlin says:
Hey there! I'm so sorry for the massive delay on this!

First of all, I love reading Andromeda! I think you've written her really well and I think you've gotten her personality very accurate!

However, I did notice a few mistakes but they're very easy fixes!

Hey guys, I've started seeing a therapist because I think my mental stability is at stake.

I think that should either be in quote marks 'Hey guys, I've started seeing a therapist because I think my mental stability is at stake.' or italics Hey guys, I've started seeing a therapist because I think my mental stability is at stake. to really show that it is her thought process. I think this is just a personal opinion of mine though!

Shutup Lestrange - should be, "Shut up, Lestrange" Shut up is two words and there should be a comma when someone's name follows.

and hand changed it again during their sixth year to Pru.

You've just mistyped 'had' as hand in this sentence ;)

"Seriously Andromeda," Marcy said...

"Seriously, Andromeda," Marcy said… This just needed a comma after 'Seriously'. I can't remember the exact rule at this moment but I know you generally need a comma before someone's name is in the speech. (You'll have to excuse me, I'm a bit sick at the moment so my brain is kind of like gudshvbhfbkvsbvj :P)

"Don't you worry Andromeda,"

"Don't you worry, Andromeda," Again, this is the same rule as before!

Also, I felt like Andromeda was being way too 'Slytherins are evil'-esque. I know she feels distant from them, but I feel like you're kind of falling into the stereotype that all Slytherins are evil and I understand why Andromeda would think that but I feel like she would still try to come up with excuses for them as they are her family, friends, and family friends.

However, that's just my opinion! Feel free to ignore it!

I also like Ted. He seems like a really intriguing character and I can't wait for them to interact more and more! :D

Anywho, this was a really good chapter! If none of this makes sense, feel free to PM me and I'll try to explain it better because although it makes sense to me, it might not make sense to anyone else (this is why being sick sucks) :P

Feel free to request again!

- Kayla :)

Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review! I will definitely go back and fix those errors. I have to have one of my days where I just sit and proofread my stories haha :P

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