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Review:Pretense Of Perfection says:
I'm so intrigued by this story so far! Poor Sydney, having to deal with Miles and what he put her makes me want to kick him. Really hard.

Over the past few chapters I've seen a few spelling and grammatical errors, but again, it's nothing that a good beta couldn't help you with quite easily. The forums here really do have excellent tools to help us with our writing. There's been a few instances in the same sentence where you've repeated your point twice through the same actions or facial expression, but nothing that detracts from the quality of the writing.

Sirius is kind of a jerk sometimes though, huh? Then again, it seems pretty in character for him to be acting the way he does, at least in my mind. I think Sydney handles him pretty well for the most part. I am also enjoying her blossoming friendship with Lily. I think they two of them could become quite close, and I think Sydney really needs a good friend that she can rely on...

With that being said, I've LOVED 95% of your characters and characterizations, although I do feel that I have to point out that Sydney's best friend, Ashley, seems two-dimensional to me at this point. I hope with their little argument that will change and she'll be fleshed out a bit more, as I just feel that we don't really know her quite well enough. As Sydney's best friend, she doesn't seem to be around very often, yet at least.

Keep up the awesome work, I can't wait to read the last couple of chapters I have yet to finish.

Author's Response: Thank you so much!! I'll try to remember to get myself a beta! Please keep reading, the next chapter is undergoing construction!

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