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Review:jessicalorewrites says:
Why hello - here for the review exchange! I was so excited to start reading this next chapter because I completely loved the first one!

First of, I adore the use of flashbacks right at the very beginning. It draws the reader in and, to me, it helps show how scattered Lavender's mind seems to be. I think in her current state she's likely to be experiencing her own flashbacks so it's great for the reader to get to experience this with her.

I can't even cope with how cute Charlie is! I love little children like him and I just think it's so sweet how he is unconsciously helping Lavender deal with everything that has happened.

What quite confused me was the sentence from one of the flashbacks, "I have been branded a thief." I'm not quite sure what Lavender means here - but I hope to discover soon? Or am I just completely missing something very obvious?

It's so bittersweet that Parvati and Lavender haven't spoken in over six months. Their friendship is strong and genuine, that much is obvious, and it is a shame Parvati was blocked out like she was. But at the same time it is completely understandable. Parvati's revelation was not something I was expecting but it really adds to the story and it was a good way of helping Lavender understand that it's alright to be scared.

Seriously though, I wish I could have a friendship as strong as these two. There doesn't seem to be anything that can truly hold them back.

Once again an amazing read - I'm so glad I got paired with you! Truly.

- Jess xo

Author's Response: Hi again! Aw, thanks so much!

I'm really happy that you liked the flashbacks that I used at the beginning of the chapter. I wanted to show the way that even though she improved a little in the last chapter, she's still suffering, and her mind is still a bit scattered.

Charlie! ♥ He's so adorable when he helps Lavender and wants to just play. His innocence is just what Lavender needs at the moment to help find some light again.

Ah, that line was a sort of metaphor. Lavender has the scars on her neck from Greyback - the brand - and she's a thief because she feels that she should have died, and can't understand why she didn't when so many others did.

Parvati is really important for Lavender in this story. The friendship is very strong and it's going to help Lavender through, and it was important for me to show that a girl doesn't need to be 'saved' by a guy, but her friends around her are the ones who'll be there for her all the way through.

Thank you so much for these continued amazing reviews, and I'm really glad we got paired together as well!


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