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Review:CambAngst says:
Hi, Beth! It's me again. I have this awful feeling that I'm going to run out of published chapters soon. I hope you're cranking away behind the scenes. Anyway, I'm tagging you again from Review Tag.

I love the change we see in Rose right from the beginning. It isn't healthy, the way that she's walled herself off emotionally for so long. She let the walls down just a bit and, hey, look at that! She's feeling more than a little bit human again. I really hope this is the start of something good for her. That said, I think there's still some self-delusion going on here: Besides, it was under control, anyway. I think the jury's still out on that.

Oh, my. So we finally have clarity on what happened to Rose. That sounds like the nastiest curse ever devised. I thought you did an amazing job with the descriptions, conveying the terrible results without going too far overboard on the gory details. And in the midst of all that, you drop in this little gem: All I remember is a shock of white flyaway hair walking out of the room. Wow, that's pretty suggestive. Draco? Lucius? Wizard with white hair screams "Malfoy" to me.

I do have to nitpick you just a bit on the idea of "throwing off" the Cruciatus Curse. I don't think it's possible, at least not in canon. The point of the curse is that it causes "unbearable" pain. Just a thought.

Why are drunk people so prone to having sudden, deep bouts of honesty? Somebody should really study this phenomenon. I loved the raw emotions you were able to tap into with Scorpius's confessions. The pain and embarrassment and inadequacy and regret... powerful stuff. Rose has her own rejoinder to that, baring a bit of her soul to him, as well. The two of them came amazingly close, yet they still held back just a little. I admire the pacing. It would have been very easy to throw them into one another's arms at that moment.

I noticed one small typo while I was reading:

I knew how to throw of a crucio curse anyway, thanks to Uncle Harry. -- throw off

So do you mind if I speculate for a moment? I think Rose's scars are going to be a big hurdle for them to get over. They won't really matter to Scorpius, but it's such an emotional trauma for Rose. Beyond that, if it turns out that Draco or Lucius was involved in Rose's abduction... wow. I don't know how they're going to handle that.

Great job!

Author's Response: Hi Dan,

Thanks for another wonderful review. I look forward to all of them! I fixed the point you made about not being able to throw off the crucio curse (and because I took it out, the typo is no longer there). It wasn't pertinent to the story and I try to be accurate, as much as possible.

I think Rose is tired of the emotional dungeon she has created for herself. Two years is a long time. This chapter ended on a light note for the couple, but it can't be completely smooth sailing for them now, can it?

You are dead on about Rose's scars. She can't really even look at them herself (until this chapter), let alone discuss them with anyone else. The scars will be a big deal - and I have something planned for that as well. I actually don't mind the speculation. If you had asked at the start of the story, I would've been more apprehensive, but that is because I feel like I am blatantly obvious about the clues that I leave.

As far as publishing the story goes, the next chapter is in the queue right now and I am going to try to do about one per week.

Thanks again Dan!

~Beth


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