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Review:CambAngst says:
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I really like the idea you have here. As Voldemort traveled the world, perfecting his craft and gathering allies, the Soviet Union would have been a really clever place to learn and recruit.

The Soviet Minister was a suitably stoic and ambitious character. I liked the way you framed the scope of his plans and the obvious parallels to the non-magical Soviets' own ambitions in the wake of World War II. The environment you dropped him into was spot-on for the Russian winter and the picture you painted was vivid and crisp.

So this is where Voldemort meets Dolohov and Karkaroff. Interesting. I'm not always a fan of using canon characters to this extent. Sometimes it feels like the author is using canon names just to avoid having to develop and flesh out original characters. In this case, though, I think it works. Both characters have obvious eastern European origins.

Voldemort's traversal of the obstacle course was the one place where I felt like you could have done a little better on the descriptions. In places, like describing the Manticore and the Devil's Snare, I felt like your delivery was a bit dry. More like narrative than action. I think it would have read better if you'd given us brief glimpses of the obstacles to begin with -- a swipe of a paw here, a wicked, clinging vine there -- and then allowed the protagonist of the chapter to figure out the nature of the creature or plant.

Aside from that, I thought your writing flowed really well. This was a smooth, easy read with no typos or grammatical problems that I could spot. Good job!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review!

I'm somewhat fascinated by this era of Voldemort's life. We don't really know his whereabouts, but I think somewhere in Eastern Europe would have suited him perfectly.

Vladimir was definitely intended to be something of a magic version of Stalin, and I'm really glad the winter imagery seemed to work.

There does seem to be some sort of Eastern European connection with the Death Eaters, and years of watching Bond movies have taught me that the best villains tend to come from that part of the world.

I get what you'rs saying about the obstacle course scene. It's one of those things that seems so epic when it plays out in my head, but it can be a little more difficult to convey that onto the page.

Thanks again!


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