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Review:CambAngst says:
Hi, Lindsey! Tagging you from Review Tag!

That was one seriously disturbing dream. I have to say that I really admire your courage, kind of dancing on a thin line with ToS compliance. I'm not sure I would have had the courage to go there. The effect was really powerful. Not quite as powerful, however, as...

Fred. Wow. I did not see that coming. I'll withhold judgment on whether he really visited Ginny in her dream or whether she simply dreamed it, but I don't think you could have chosen a more potent manifestation of all of Ginny's fears and anxieties. Putting Fred in Healer's robes, having him be serious and grim... it was a lot to visualize. He's even crying at one point. It wasn't easy to read and it really made an impact on me.

Ginny's, er, symptoms added another level of discomfort to the scene. And the ultrasound spell was the clincher. You created a truly horrifying nightmare.

After she wakes up, I liked what you did with her reaction. Initially snapping at Harry, then Harry snapping back, then having the two of them quickly make up sounded like the two of them. At least, it sounded like a version of the two of them that's a little more mature than they were in the books.

I'm really glad that she decided to contact a healer. I'm not wild about where things are probably going, mind you, but it's a good step for her. Her lack on certainty on the proper way to phrase the letter -- and the approximations she chooses -- added just a bit of levity to this very heavy chapter.

Poor Ginny. Even now, she can't quite escape the notoriety that she and Harry share. I hope the healer doesn't turn out to be some sort of awful Boy-Who-Lived groupie.

I think your writing continues to improve with each chapter, although there were a few sentences in this one that were kind of long and rough around the edges. If you keep delivering on the emotional content and impact and work on your editing, you'll be in awesome shape! Good job!

Author's Response: Hi there!
Thank you so much! I am glad you enjoyed reading and thanks for your advice!! I hope you come back for more. It is a disturbing dream and I tried to make it as emotional as possible because it is a very very emotional thing to go through. I thank you so much for reviewing another chapter! Hope to talk again soon!
-Lindsey


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