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Review:tribble says:
Review tag time once again from me!

I do like a good first person story I have to say, writing in first person is how I normally write and so it was nice to click this and find that this was also a good first person one-shot. And this is a really good first-person one-shot if I have to say so myself! The description of everything was spot on and I think you captured everyone's personalities really nicely and better than I could have done. I think that writing Wormtail in first person around this time in the HP books would have been difficult, but I feel like you managed it perfectly and I would be rather proud with the way you characterized him. And then there was good old Severus Snape covering his tracks while taking his vengeance out on Pettigrew for betraying the Potters to the Dark Lord and getting Lily killed. I imagine something like this would have happened because I doubt Snape would let Peter get away with it because he did love Lily deeply.

Honestly I could go on for hours about you description of things. Oh I do love a good bit of description and you nailed it on the head perfectly ten times over and I could love you for that. Sometimes people go for too much description or they just don't use it at all, but this was perfect how you did it, using quite a lot, but not taking away from the story but indeed adding a lot more to it.

Everything about this is wonderful and this is one of the best one-shots I have read to date. Great job!

Author's Response: Hi, there.

Writing in first person is always challenging for me. I find myself drifting back into third person and I keep having to back up and fix that. But when it works, it's pretty awesome. I'm glad you liked it. I tried to do a version of Wormtail that I thought was closer to his book characterization than the fawning, spineless piece of comic relief that he was portrayed as in the movies. I really enjoyed writing Snape in this. It was fun to take him out of his usual, cool, calculating persona and tap into all of the anger I'm sure he was carrying after Lily's death.

Thanks for all of the kind words, and thanks for reading and reviewing!

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