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Review:LilyFire says:
Oh,this seems really cool. The introduction was perfect, setting up history and plot and tone without being boring or overdone. Alicia's quite the character, and I really like her voice and thought process. Was she named after the Chaser on the Gryffindor Quidditch team (or is that her mom) or did Lee just forget about her?

I'm confused as to why Albus wants to be part of a business if he's a professor, but I guess that'll be covered later. I also like how you introduced all the employees and what they do.

The plot you be set up for the rest of the story seems really interesting too. I can't wait to see what happens.

~Lily

Author's Response: Ooh thank you! I'm really pleased you like the introduction and that I didn't overwhelm you with all the introductions and background information! Yes, Alicia is named after the Chaser, as Alicia Spinnet (the Chaser) is friends with Alicia Jordan's mum. Both Alicia and Leanne have their first and middle names as Lee and Bex's (their parents) friends' names. Lee didn't forget about her; they're good friends!

Albus has some money in his Gringotts vault and he wants to put that to use by investing in a business because then he'll have a share of the profits that Jordan & Parsons make. He's a silent partner, so he won't actively be involved in the business, but the money will help him to have more cash or even to save up for the future. I'm pleased you like how I introduced the employees and that you like the plot!

Thanks so much for reviewing, Lily!


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