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Review:CambAngst says:
Tagging you again from Review Tag!

OK, remember that thing I sad about a murder-suicide in my last review? Yeah, forget I said that. ;)

I could feel the guilt rolling off of Scorpius at the start of this chapter. Guilt over the way that he treated his parents -- especially his mother -- just before the accident. Guilt over the fact that, by whatever sort of tortured logic grieving people tend to come up with, his presence in the house might have prevented the accident. You took him very realistically through the darkest times of his young life.

Then Rose and Albus arrive to bring back some light.

“I just… I had to see you. -- You know, this was a perfect entrée for Rose. I think it helped Scorpius a lot because it was about her, not about him. When you're in the place Scorpius is in, I imagine you get rather tired of feeling like people are putting themselves out to try to help you. Rose makes it obvious that helping him means as much to her as she expects it to mean to him. It's a small distinction, but I think you got it just right.

I love the little adventure Rose and Al go on to find their way to Daphne's house. Not a small thing for children from magical households.

Out of the entire, ridiculous scene when Ron finds them in the bedroom of Daphne's house, I think Daphne's poor, terrified muggle husband was my favorite part. The guy is obviously scared out of his wits, and the little snippets of his phone call with Daphne were the perfect thing to balance out this very tense scene.

Ha! Rose sounds so much like her mother while she's "defending Scorpius's honor". I'm really glad that she was able to talk her father down. That could have ended... badly.

Aww, it seems like Daphne was actually trying really hard to look out for Scorpius. I like what you've done with her character. Most people write her as such an irredeemable airhead. I especially liked the fact that she was realistic enough to know when she was in over her head. Or maybe it was just that her poor husband was in over his head. Either way, I was really pleased to see Scorpius heading off to live with the Potters.

Wow. Rose is an amazing friend. She seems to have such an intuitive understanding of what Scorpius needs. Now I'm more curious that ever to know what happened during her abduction. What turns this warm, supportive person into somebody who became emotionally disconnected and struggled with personal interactions. What have you done to my Rosie, Beth? :p

OK, back to the present! This was a great two-chapter blast from the past, but I'm really eager to see how the future plays out. Great job!

Although that last sentence has me a little concerned...

Author's Response: Hi Dan,

Don't worry about the murder-suicide prediction - I like that I can keep you on your toes...

Yeah, Scorpius is going to feel guilty about everything for a while. I needed him to be just as damaged as Rose. And I wanted her to be his light. I want to portray that they always had a deeper connection to each other - even before either one of them could see it.

As far as Aunt Daphne goes - thanks for the compliment about her and Uncle Phil. It was sort of fun to write from the perspective of a muggle bloke when a whole bunch of magical witches and wizards start showing up at your house nonstop - haha. I wanted Scorpius to have as little family as possible, so I figured that Daphne would have been totally turned off by the whole wizarding world after the second war. When she met a muggle, she saw her way out.

Rose is amazingly sweet and kind - especially to Scorpius. So - I feel that I must warn you... You probably won't be too happy at what is revealed about your Rosie in the next chapter...


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