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Review:jessicalorewrites says:
Hey, I'm here because you requested a review on my topic! So I actually thought I'd already reviewed this off my own back a few weeks ago, so I was really confused when I saw you'd requested it. Then I came and checked and realised I actually hadn't sent it - oops! Anyway, first off I'm going to answer each of your areas of concern like before and then add in my own little thoughts about different things that I like :)

1. Does Cassie seem real?
Like I said in my last review, Cassie was very believable and she continues to be in this chapter as well. You add little details about her which just help with the realism of her character. Things like the fact she used to have one night stands - a lot of fics paint an angelic picture of teen mothers, so it's refreshing to see someone a little more original. I can also sooo relate to Cassie burning her mouth on her drink - I do that all the time! It's why I hate hot drinks (similar to James, ay).

2. Does James seem like a good guy? Was it perfect timing for their coffee meeting?
Yes, James definitely seems like he's going to shape up to be an amazing character - I can't wait to find out more about your characterisation of him! The coffee break was timed perfectly to work well but I also like the fact it didn't go so well because of Ryan, as that means more coffee (or drinks) dates in the future ;)

3. What is your opinion of Ryan?
I don't like him. I would think it hard for anybody to like him. The fact he has the audacity to accuse, in so many words, Cassie of being a bad mother when he hasn't been there for Gabrille really irks me. He's a very well written character who serves well as an original take on the 'antagonist' figure!

4. Do the relationships between Ryan/Cassie and James/Cassie seem real?
Yes! I love the way Cassie interacts with them both, showing two different sides to her personality. With Ryan she gets irked very easily and yet she seems to have more patience for James, which is great because they seem very cute together.

5. Is the flow/pace good?
Indeed it is. There's not much really to say here because you've pretty much nailed this one on the head.

I can't wait for you to update the next chapter! I'll try to remember to review this time, oops.

Thank you!

- Jess xo

Author's Response: Hey!

Haha, oh dear. I think we've all done that before :)

I was kind of worried about that snippet of information because whilst I didn't want to show Cassie in that sort of light, but I wanted to show how much her life changed when she did fall pregnant. Like you said, not all teen mothers are angelic. Ha I love that you relate to that :)

I love writing James, because he's a bit fun, a bit cocky as well as the softer side to him. Oh yes, more dates to come.

Whilst even I dislike Ryan, that was partly because I wanted to show how he's not a decent guy, compared to James. And to show how much Cassie had grown up whilst Ryan stayed with his childish ways.

Cassie definitely acts different with the two boys, but then doesn't everyone act certain ways around one person and then another way around someone else. I think it would only take Ryan to breath to irk anyone, he's just got that personality. As for James he's laid back just like Cassie is in a way so they get on really well.

Thank you so much, hun!

Soph xxx

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