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Review:CambAngst says:
Tagging you again from Review Tag!

Beth, Beth, Beth... It was bad enough what you did to my Rosie, but now you go and do this to my Astoria! Harsh. I'm seriously in mourning at the moment.

Again, I have to commend you on your pacing with this story. Every chapter, it seems like another piece of the picture is being revealed. I wondered about Scorpius's brooding anger at the end of the last chapter. Now we get some very important context which complemented that beautifully.

I never imagined that Scorpius had an especially warm, nurturing childhood. His mother and grandmother were probably very supportive, but they do come from the sort of upbringing that probably emphasized emotional stoicism and maintaining a stiff upper lip. Then there's the matter of his father and grandfather. That unshakeable Malfoy facade combined with that Malfoy arrogance. Obviously they would have hated the idea of him taking up with the Potters or -- gods forbid! -- playing a muggle game with a muggle boy.

I really liked what you did with the muggle boy, Mason. It would have been easy, and definitely the most common approach, to try to use Mason's character to make some "deep" statement about how muggles and magical folk aren't so different after all. Instead, you used the character to show something important about Scorpius. Wow, that boy is stubborn!

The scene in the Malfoys' kitchen... gah! I can't believe you killed them! This seemed a bit like a murder-suicide. Maybe Draco lost control and then couldn't live with himself afterward. It's hard to say, Scorpius's recollection of the events is understandably spotty.

Why? Why did you do that to my Astoria? My poor feels!

Great job with this! It couldn't hurt me if I wasn't so into it. ;)

Author's Response: Hi Dan!

Sorry I haven't responded to this until now. You obviously spend a lot of time writing the reviews and I don't want to just write a quick "thanks a bunch!" back to you.

As far as Astoria goes... I'm sorry? I have to admit, when I wrote this, I wasn't a huge Astoria fan. More like, I just didn't give the character a lot of thought. Since reading some fantastically written Astoria fics, I can see where you are coming from.

I really needed Scorpius to be damaged. Rose is damaged and I wanted their relationship to be more than just forbidden love. I also placed them both in Ravenclaw to give them an added closeness at being housemates, but, more importantly misfits from their own families. Hopefully, it plays out well.

Thanks for commenting on Mason. I almost took him out, but I wanted to show how isolated Scorpius was when he wasn't at Hogwarts. He is growing up and doesn't want to be with his parents all the time, but doesn't totally fit in with the muggle kids either. He feels the most comfortable when he is with Al and Rose. Yeah, he's stubborn, but he is also fifteen and not getting his way...

Sorry again about Astoria (haha), but she does live on in Scropius, and you will see some of that come out later in the story.

Thanks again, Dan. I really look forward to your reviews. I hold my breath every time!


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