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Review:Miss Undaztood Black says:
You're setting up G's family life really well, I like it :)
Back story is difficult to set up as it can slow a story down and make it feel like it hasn't started yet etc, but you're doing a good job of making it interesting and engaging in its own right.
While reading, I did notice a few spelling and grammar mistakes that, while they are inevitable, can detract from a reader's enjoyment of your story. Examples are 'personation' when you meant 'impersonation', calling Scorpius 'Scorpious', etc. Have you considered getting a beta reader?
But those are minor considerations next to characterisation and story flow and things like that, all of which you're doing really well :)

Author's Response: Thank you! Yeah, I didn't want to explain it but rather show her family life and hopefully I did that haha. Yes, I just contacted someone about becoming my beta so that will help a lot with those types of things. Glad you think the story is working so far!

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