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Review:adluvshp says:
Hey! Here for your (almost a month late) requested review from the forums! I am terribly sorry about the delay, it has been crazy busy!

This keeps getting more and more interesting. I loved the segment in the beginning - it made me so curious to know who this person was and what parchment they burnt. Was it the will? Gah you wrote it wonderfully.

I also enjoyed the interaction between Bella and Sirius. I like the way she is characterised and the manner in which she talked to Sirius. It's interesting she is set on finding the killer, and Sirius is going to help!

The dinner table moment was the best of all though. It was amusing how no one would eat and finally Sirius broke the silence lol. I also liked his characterisation, the way he was almost jealous of Crouch for not caring about what others say and how he wanted to do the same. Very interesting!

I am especially intrigued now to what the letter said which Sirius found that it evoked such a reaction. The mystery just keeps getting better and better and I'm super excited to keep reading. I hope to be able to come back for more soon!

Over all, I loved the chapter. It was smooth, plot is developing awesomely (though I'd like to see another murder happen sometime soon - yes I am weird haha), characterisations are great, and grammar was pretty okay. Good job!!

Cheers
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Hey there! No worries about delays - I completely understand! Hope everything's okay in RL! :)

Omigosh, I'm so glad you liked it! It was a surprisingly hard scene to write without giving anything away... I kept thinking things would be clues and all :P It could be the will... theoretically... or it could not be :P

I actually really like writing Bella and Sirius interaction, haha. There's something so charged about it all... and yeah, Bella isn't happy about this whole killing thing.. it's her job! :P

Gah, I'm so so glad you liked that one as that was the bit I was the most worried about! :) Yeah, it would have to be Sirius - the rest of them are all too paranoid! I kinda liked making that comparison between them - because for me it sort of highlighted their differences, I think.

Ooh, the letter... you'll find out soon, don't worry! I'm not going to torment you over that one! :P

Gah, thank you so so much for the lovely review and I'm so glad you're still enjoying the story! (There may be another murder or two... who knows? :P)

Aph xx


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