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Review:Rumpelstiltskin says:
I realize that it is taking me forever to get my reviews done, I apologize for the wait!

Plot/plot arch: The supreme carefulness of the murderer is certainly going to make life difficult for the investigators (whether they be of Muggle or wizarding law enforcement). While the sole word "Wanderers" meant virtually nothing to Tyran, Albus's deduction of the underlined portion of the word "wand" and the fact that it was written in lipstick to point him in the direction of the murderer being a witch. Clever. So, Tyran was kissing...someone...quite possibly Mark but who knows :). At least they all have ONE piece of information, if anything. I wonder how this is going to pan out.

Characterization: Albus -- he seems slightly like Harry, but with his own personal twist. I think you've done a great job with him. Bella -- While it's natural to blame herself for her father's death, there may just be something more to this than you're letting us believe!


Style: The technique you've used from the last chapter to this chapter -- switching POVs from Taryn's to Albus' -- allows the reader to follow along both sides of the story. I appreciate that!

Notes/other: It will be interesting to see where the story goes, and if Tyran will consequently learn about the magical world. Great job!

-Rumpel

Author's Response: This review makes me happy! I'm really glad that you are liking it and already wondering things about the characters and the plot line! This is my first attempt at a mystery so I'm glad its at least bringing up some questions for you! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!

~Slytherinchica08~


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