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Review:teh tarik says:
Hi there! I'm here with your review. :)

So, I just read through all three chapters, and I think you've got a great start to a Teddy-centric story. It's quite rare to read fics about single fathers, so congrats on tackling this topic. Poor Teddy. He's such a devoted guy, but still reeling from Victoire's death. :( I love how dedicated and loving he is toward Christian, how he struggles sometimes, but still does his best over the years. I'm glad Christian has him as a father! I really enjoyed that bit in which you wrote him feeling uncomfortable that all the other mums pass him by and stop to talk to baby Christian, but hardly acknowledge him. It's a lovely bit of characterisation - it shows his discomfort, especially since it's usually the mum who's going about pushing the baby in the pram rather than the dad. Well, usually! :P

Little Christian is adorable! I love the way you've written him, and I think you've captured his baby voice very well. :P And I like that he feels he should be acknowledged; perhaps he feels that the role of the dad is overshadowed by the role of the mum in modern parenting? I dunno.

Natalie is indeed a very interesting OC. She's funny and a bit careless with her words, very 'out-there', which makes a nice contrast to Teddy, who's rather quiet and a little lost with his life. Is this going to be a Teddy/OC? I think Natalie would complement Teddy's character nicely! Also, I find it really interesting that she's not keen on having her own children, and yet dotes on Emily. I'm very interested to see how you'll develop their friendship / relationship.

Your story really sounds promising! It's a mixture of sad and sweet, love and loss, and I think you've maintained a great balance between the two. There's not too much soul-crushing angst, and you've shown that Teddy does indeed have a kind of resilience. I'm sure he'll turn out to be a great dad.

Great work! I'm so glad I had the chance to read this. :D

-teh

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