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Review:marauderfan says:
Review swap! I skimmed the first chapters so I could review this one for you, since it had no reviews yet.

The beginning was so sad with Victoire's death during childbirth :( But by this point it looks like Teddy has recovered somewhat. Obviously he still misses her but it feels like he has been able to move on.

I am glad he's making a friend though! Haha, and it's so true that going to the park with a little kid (or a dog) will instantly mean you make friends!

You know, I'd never considered how it might be hard for wizards to keep quiet about stuff like the war when in the presence of Muggles, especially in Teddy's case where his parents died in the war, the war played a huge part in his life... but what does he say to Muggles? Im glad you touched on that here, with Teddy's struggle to not give everything away.

Haha and I loved how Teddy lamented how everyone in his family is named after everyone else. I've always wondered that myself about the next generation :D Good for Teddy breaking the tradition.

Your dialogue between the characters is really good, though I think a little more description/action would complement it really nicely! I was a little unsure about the Lupin thing though, like Natalie seemed to make the association with werewolves out of nowhere, it was kind of an odd comment for her to make. Lupine is also a flower, in addition to being a word to describe wolves - so the fact that she zeroed in on werewolves just seemed odd to me. Maybe that's just me though!

Anyway, a great start to your story and I hope that Natalie's friendship helps Teddy in the recovery process from his wife's death! Lovely work on this so far.

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