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Review:newgenerationlover says:
Hi, here from the review swap!

I really like your story! Right now I'm usually reading humor fics, so this was a really nice change up. You have done a great job making this story flow, no awkwardness/forced-ness at all. Already shipping Teddy and Natalie! I thought you did a good job on Teddy's thoughts on dating- how he feels he just isn't ready. But you showed it in a not too in your face type of way which was good. Sorry if none of this is really making much sense, I'm kinda super tired right now haha. The only thing I would look back on if I were you is in the first chapter when Teddy finds out Vic died. All you said was there was a frown on the doctors face and thats how Teddy deduced his wife had died. There are so many things that can go wrong in child birth, usually with the baby- who I actually thought something happened to before the whole 'sheet over the body' thing. Maybe add like "There was a complication, sir, with your wife." Or something along those lines. Other than that I really liked it and I will check back for future chapters!

xoxo

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! And it totally makes sense! I did go back and try to fix that in the first chapters. I'm really glad you liked my characters so much, especially Natalie. I was afraid no one would really like her or that she would be a bland character, so that makes me feel a lot better.
~Lily


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