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Review:Lululuna says:
Back again!

Aw, this chapter was so great! I really liked the mix of typical family problems - like getting Emmaline to calm down - and Victoire's daily work and the emotional strain it puts upon her. It's interesting how Victoire kind of has to play the bad cop parent and keep Emmaline in line: since she spends far more time with her than Teddy (despite being busy at work) it makes sense that they would have that sort of relationship. I liked seeing the family dynamics, and Victoire stalling to avoid bickering with Teddy and then using her feminine wiles to distract him were just perfect. :P

I really liked seeing how things worked at St. Mungo's, like how the Healers were often too tired to Apparate home properly, and the wizarding equivalent of the pagers. That was really neat, and from what I know of hospitals I feel like you captured it very well. The little girl's story was so sad, and I really felt how Victoire was emotionally invested, particularly since the girl was close to Emmaline's age. I'm looking forward to learning more about her and I really hope she'll be okay, of course! She seems like a really interesting character and I'm curious to see if perhaps Victoire will get more involved with her case. The scene at the end, where she went and hugged Emmaline and was so emotional, was so lovely.

One thing I was a little confused about was why Vic was in such a rush to get to work on time, but then waited around for forty minutes for Van, which made her late. It felt a little inconsistent that she'd be late for her shift because she waited for Van, when she was in such a rush to get to work in the first place, you know? So it might make more sense if there was another explanation, like she went to Van's house to go to work with her and Van was running ten minutes behind schedule or something - just something which I thought of, but feel free to ignore. :)

I really like how you focus on the daily hardships and details of being a Healer, and the little details like Victoire's decorated scrubs were fantastic. She's such a down-to-earth, relatable character, and I'm really loving reading about their little family. :)

This was really well written as well! The one little thing I noticed was that there were a few slips into present tense, but those are easily fixed with a quick read-through. :) This was another wonderful chapter! :D

Author's Response: Haha "feminine wiles" That's the best thing here already! :3

St. Mungo's is my favorite to do because, as I already said, I'm a HUGE fan of "The Office", but I also LOVE "Scrubs" and "Grey's Anatomy". So I wanted to get those two to mix in here in a way that I could always enjoy them in my own works.

As for the little girl, we shall see! ;)

This makes sense and I don't know what happened in my story. Maybe I was editing and didn't get it all the way out? I'm sorry that really is pretty confusing! I'll try and edit that in the next beta-round! Thank you for bringing this to my attention!

Thank you for the reads and the wonderful review! You truly make me want to just sit down and type out the next chapter right now! (Which I just might do with all my free time ;)).


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