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Review:nott theodore says:
Hi! I'm glad I saw that you'd updated this and I actually have a chance to leave a review straight away this time :)

I loved the way that you wrote this chapter. With the excitement of winning the cup, they really did deserve a proper celebration afterwards and I think you captured the spirit of that perfectly. It was quite chaotic with all of the relatives and friends congratulating him, but I think that matched the mood of what was happening really well. Winning the world cup would result in some chaos!

Ah, I smiled so much to see Molly and Arthur waiting at the Hinkypunk for James so that they could congratulate him before leaving - it's exactly the sort of thing that they'd do, but really sweet and touching all the same.

I've said this before, but you always do a brilliant job of managing so many characters getting involved in one scene. I never have any problem keeping all the characters straight in my head and that's always impressive with the sheer number of Weasleys that there are!

I could sense that we're getting to the end of this story more than ever in this chapter, I think, with some resolution being given to what's happened to different characters throughout. But there are still questions about what will happen to them in the future and I'm hoping we'll be seeing more of them in the sequel!

I love the way all of James's family are genuinely so proud of him and happy for him, and their ways of showing that are so different. Getting him to drink in celebration is not necessarily the wisest move, since he's not been drinking through the tournament and he's got the Weasley family dinner at the Burrow tomorrow. I suspect he might regret downing all those drinks in the morning...

Freddie was so funny with the top-shelfer, but it was great to hear about him finally getting some direction in his life, even if his parents seem to have been the ones who made the decision. I don't think they'd have stopped him leaving but I always imagine Fred running the joke shop after his parents and I think George and Angelina just gave him what he needed. The situation with Brigid is still to be resolved though, so I'm looking forward to that!

Ah, Ryan. I loved the fact that he'd made the effort to be at the after-party and celebrate with the winners, even though he'd just suffered the disappointment of losing the world cup final. It really shows how strong their friendship is, and I liked them bonding over their mutual hatred (too strong?) for the Lynches. I couldn't help but smile when he and Della finally kissed - at least he's got something to smile about today!

Uh oh... cliffhanger alert! I don't know why, but I have a bad feeling. I think it must be something to do with the teaching job at Hogwarts and I'm really hoping that James isn't going to take the job (even though he'd be a great teacher) because I can't imagine how that would work between him and Carlotta (could she go to Hogwarts?) and I'd like to see him still playing Quidditch. So I'm hoping he's just seen someone that he can ask to take on the job... although I will probably cope if he does take it :P Unless I'm on the wrong track and James is about to find Carlotta a job or a cure or propose or something...

Sian :)

Author's Response: This chapter was a case of "ticking off all the boxes", so to speak. James needed to have conversations with certain people, so this was the way I did it. Given the situation, it works, because everyone wants to talk to him. :)

Molly and Arthur HAD to see James. I couldn't have them just go home without congratulating him. Bless them. :) I'll admit, sometimes I struggle with the Weasley family. I have them all straight in my head, but I'll still manage to forget to feature them all when I'm writing. It can be frustrating at times. It's chapters like this which allow me to make up for it somewhat!

Don't worry, the sequel will pretty much feature the same people. It's not James' story, but it doesn't stray too far from him. It's very much a continuation of a lot of these characters' storylines. I'm looking forward to it more and more!

You know, when I was writing the next chapter I think I forgot how much James actually drank in this chapter, haha. He's not at all hungover in the morning! Slight oversight on my part there I think, especially as he's been off alcohol for a good couple of months...

Ah, Freddie. He never necessarily wanted to leave the shop, but all the same he didn't want to just be a shop boy all his life. The thought of a promotion within the business hadn't occurred to him, bless! Now he has his own shop to play with. :) And of course now that's settled, he does have a lot more idea of where his life is going, and also a lot more self-confidence. Things with Brigid are resolved in the next chapter (well, resolved off-screen but revealed there).

Hatred is definitely not too strong a word to use when the Lynches are involved! ;)

Oh dear, I don't like your bad feeling. :( Thanks for reviewing!


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