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Review:TidalDragon says:
Howdy! Dropping by to tag you from the review thread in the CR!

First things first, I really liked the way you told this story from the first person. You gave Astoria a unique and believable voice that carried through the whole chapter and I thought that was a real asset to the early "snapshots" in particular.

I also liked the way you filled in Astoria's character. My favorite way you did this was actually the bit about abandoning magic for three years. I have always considered how many with closer ties to the Muggle world would consider doing this in the aftermath of the Second Wizarding War. I'm a bit surprised at a pureblood doing it, because I have no idea how they would get on, but I guess that tells us something about Astoria's character too that she was able to, so well done!

I did notice a few typos here and there or closed repeated words or phrases (describing her reaction when Draco "passed by" multiple times in the beginning is one example of what I mean by this), but those are minor concerns.

Overall I really enjoyed the piece and I think it has a lot of potential given the nice characterization you've led with and the different POV (different for me anyway - I've only read one other Astoria POV story).

Keep up the good work!

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