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Review:nott theodore says:
Hey! I finally made it!

Okay, the FEELS.

England won! I really wanted them to because I felt like James has worked so hard that he deserves it now, but I was afraid you weren't going to let it happen because you're good at plot twists :P But I've got a massive grin on my face because of that!

"I always knew I'd get to watch a Weasley play Quidditch for England one day. He beamed. - You're missing a speech mark here after day

Okay, so back to the beginning. I love Ginny's character so much, especially the way that you write her - she's still Ginny from the books but she's grown into a mother and more like Molly too. She's just brilliant.

I love the whole family turning up to James's flat to support him before the biggest match he's played in his life. And Freddie just turning up casually without having said - I feel like Ginny knew he'd come through and turn up for James, no matter what. They're so awesome as a family, even if they've all, undoubtedly, had their problems in the past. I just love the fact that they all pull through for James when he needs it most.

Ah, Ron. Betting without Hermione knowing. *nods* Yep, that sounds like him!

I almost cried when Molly said the part about his second grandparents being proud of him. It was just so sweet and such a Molly thing to say, knowing that that link was important for James and his siblings just like it was important for Harry. You've made me feel so many emotions with just this one chapter and I'm always so amazed when you can do that.

All the people came through for James in the end - it made me smile so much. Like seeing Della there even though she's got reason to root for Ryan, and the same with Brigid. It's difficult for all of them with split loyalties but I'm glad you didn't ignore that and make the way easy for them.

Your description of the stadium and the camp was amazing, I really felt like I was there. I loved the Irish and the English reactions, they're so realistic.

Could you think of anything for an English mascot? Ours would be so rubbish compared to others, for something magical :P Like a Blast Ended Skrewt or something while the Welsh have their awesome dragons :P But yeah, I liked the detail about them being banned.

As ever, I'm still impressed by the way that you write Quidditch, and writing a whole chapter that basically consisted of the final must have been quite a feat. But it was so well paced and I felt like I was there watching the whole match.

I loved the fact that the main conflict in the match was between the Bagmans and the Lynches. It felt right considering what we've already seen happen between them in previous matches. It makes sense that while most of the two teams admire and respect each other, those pairs would have been holding grudges. Also much easier to not have to remember all those names :P

And Ryan helping to pull Cato off Lynch! I was so happy that you made him do that, especially when it would have been so much easier for him to sit back and watch, especially since it would have been better for Ireland - England could have ended up with no beaters on the pitch! But it just showed the camaraderie between all the players for the same team and I loved that aspect of it. Ryan's great.

I felt so proud of James when he scored that penalty, like I was his aunty or sister or something :P I guess that just shows how brilliantly you've developed James as a character, because I feel like I know him like I real person now.

Jess is pretty awesome too. I love the fact Michael hands the trophy right to her - goodness knows how long the match would have gone on for if it hadn't been for that catch!

The fact that James felt relief before anything else seemed right - I'm sure I've read interviews with sportsmen and women who've won a major tournament and they always say the first thing they felt was relief. (Okay, that was a random ramble but hopefully you get the picture :P)

AND ENGLAND WON THE WORLD CUP YAY! I don't really know what else to say but I was really happy about that, and I can't wait to see what's in store next. I feel like there might be a plot twist coming up...

Sian :)

Author's Response: And now I'm finally here! :)

Me? Plot twist? I don't know where you get that idea from. ;) But yes, England won! In different circumstances I might have been tempted to have Ireland win, because England winning does come dangerously close to being cliched... But for James' personal story to continue as it does, he had to win the World Cup. So England won!

Ooh, thanks for letting me know about my AWOL speech mark! That must have been lopped off by accident in editing. It's back now though!

Fun fact: I was never that fond of Ginny at first. At least, it took me a long time to warm to Harry/Ginny, but then I think that's more down to how JK portrayed her (i.e. in my opinion her transition from giggly 11-year-old to the girl we were told she was in HBP wasn't really shown, but that's a topic of discussion for another time). But I think she would have inherited that maternal nature from Molly, while still remaining as cheeky as she was before. She's one of my personal favourites to write.

Ah, them Weasleys, they're so lovely when they're being all supportive-family-unit, aren't they? Ron hiding his bet from Hermione, the naughty boy. And as for Molly ... she'd definitely know that James would love more than anything to know how his other grandparents would think of him. Always looking for validation, that poor boy. This bit made me all emotional when writing it.

HA, oh, the mascots. Yeah, basically I spent hours poring over Fantastic Beasts, trying to find an English mascot, and when the best I could come up with was crups (although the thought of leprechauns riding crups around is kind of cute) I decided it was time to call it a day and get round the matter some other way. So they were banned, in the most typically-wizarding-world way I could come up with.

The Quidditch match proved to be one of the most challenging aspects of this whole fic, with the pacing in particular causing me a fair bit of aggro, so I'm really glad that you liked it, thank you! :) Ah yes, the Bagman/Lynch conflict. I didn't know how I was going to write this match until I sat down and wrote it, and as I was doing so I figured there was no way they would be nice to each other. So instead, they were as brutal as could be! It also meant I could take the focus off James and the Chasers which was nice - I didn't want some fairytale 'James won the Cup singlehandedly' result. And Jess, how awesome is she?! She was only a name in this fic until this chapter, but now I kind of want to develop her a bit more, haha.

James' reaction to winning was one of the harder parts to get right. At first, the ending was too abrupt, and so I had to tweak it a little bit. But yes, I think he'd partly feel relief at it being over, and also it would feel so surreal to him that it would take a while to sink in. Bless him. :)

Thank you so much for the lovely review! Onto the next one... :)


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