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Review:TidalDragon says:
Howdy! Taking a break from my Golden Paw R&R quest so I can vote in the May Story of the Month too. Man this month is loaded!

At any rate, I thought this story was very well done. The second-person POV, which normally reads awkward to me was handled relatively unintrusively as you wisely allowed descriptions to drive certain parts of the story so that every sentence was leading with "you" or "your".

And speaking of those descriptions, they were excellent, particularly the level of detail and the ones involving emotions. You really made me feel what Sirius was feeling in the moments and the descriptions (supplemented by good word choice) were responsible for that.

The way you wove the quote in at the end was very effective, as was the whole bit between Sirius and Regulus.

A very well done and enjoyable the right word for such melancholy story (?) read!

Best of luck in the SotM voting and of course the challenge!

Author's Response: Hey! Wow, you're reviewing them all? That's just crazy!

This is my first attempt at a second- person POV so I'm glad that it worked out. Perhaps I'll use this style more often then. I felt that it managed to capture to the sort of relationship that I expected Sirius and Regulus to have. Sirius couldn't have loathed his little brother from the start.

I'm happy you liked the descriptions, I felt they added more depth to an already emotion filled story. Plus, as you've said, they do help the reader really feel what the character is going through.

Haha, I'm glad you enjoyed the story. I had so much of fun (?) writing it. Does that make me sound sadistic? I hope not.

Thanks for the wonderful review and your display of Gryffindor courage and loyalty! Seriously, every golden paw nomination? Either you must have a lot time or a huge amount of determination. I'm going to go with the latter :)

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