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Review:Iellwen says:
Aaah, such sweet love! That is sure a warm, cute chapter!

I love their discussion; how they ask each other little and big questions to get to know each other! That's how my BF and I got to know each other, at work - such a perfect way to converse quickly!! :D
Though I'm thinking Draco just warmed her up until the time was ripe; I'm thinking he really just wanted to ask her that one question... Hehehe^^

I love that her heart skips a beat when he calls her love (I totally know how she feels! ♥ )


If you don't mind, a little CC for you:

Maybe that's just me, but I thought "My seat was at the very end, a detailed carving of a tree scared the wood from my butter knife when I had nothing better to do. " was a bit confusing.
I'm thinking you mean something along the lines of:
"My seat was at the very end [of the table], right by a carving of a tree, scarring the wood - a past-time of mine when boredom overcame me." or something? (I'm not trying to tell you what to write, it's just the first sentence I thought of when I re-read the line - I'm no where near good enough to beta-read ^^)

Maybe you could use italics for the notes they scribble, to clearly separate them (though they were separate enough as it is for now, but it might get a bit confusing should you fix the copy/pasting gaps^^)

It would be perfect if you added a few details about the setting, the second part for example (I wonder, were they in the Library or in class?) :)

Anyway - just a few thoughts^^

You updated this story so quickly - I have to catch up, don't I?
Hehe, I'm looking forward to it :D

Author's Response: First off, thank you so much for reviewing! And yes, you are straight on with the carving in the table, I'll try and make that more clear!

I'll try and make it more descriptive, I just rush around trying to get my thoughts down before I lose them! Ill go back and edit, so thank you!

Feel free to review on anything else you're confused about or just like! I appreciate everything!

Have a nice day!

xTorix


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